I read my Tutor's critique with great interest. I certainly agree that the composition in some images suffered from the immediate response needed that came from the approach that I had opte to take. And with hindsight the very bright light of the cloudy weather that day caused me problems which I did not really successfully overcome at the time of taking the photographs nor in the processing of the images taken afterwards. Saturation and contrast were often not right.
It would be interesting to go back to the Pride event this year and maybe take a different approach e.g. taking a fixed location for shots in a number of locations rather than walking with and in the parade to see what kind of differing result I could achieve.
I did have a go at reworking some of the images along the lines suggested and the results are below.
Original magazine cover
Revised cover
My tutor suggested that leaving the above image to the last page of the magazine article was in a sense a waste of an image which could bring inevidence of serious local political support right at the beginning and in some resepcts it does. That said, I prefer the original image in terms of the composition. So we have a pure visual image set against a picture which sets the scene i.e. a celebration of Gay Pride supported by the city council which has the added adjunct of a figure coming out from behind the poster board. Maybe from the magazine news angle the revised cover is the more 'newsworthy' one.
Original layout - page 3
Original layout - page 5
Revised version
I chose some different images here for page 5 and cropped the image of the lady in the mask. This second version works better than the original.
Original version -page 6
Revised version
Again I changed one of the images and cropped the image of the two ladies more closely to arrive at a better interpretation of the post parade activities....avoiding tilting one of the images improves the visual aspect of the layout.
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